My Bedroom - draft one
My bedroom gives me a feeling of security. When you enter my bedroom, the first thing you notice is the large window with a beautiful curtain. Next to the large window, in the left corner,
is my wardrobe where I keep my clothes. My dresser is located in the right corner. On the right, between the dresser and the desk, is my bed. And it's also opposite to the window. Finally, next to the desk, is my bookcases where I keep all my favorite comic books. My bedroom is like my castle , so it gives me a feeling of security.

7 Comments:
Maybe you can change the way to express you feeling. Too many words duplicate. That's my suggestion.
like last sentence you may change
so it makes me a sense of safty.
your bedroom sounds like a sweet space.
in the left corner
我會用at the left corner
"next to the desk, is my bookcases where I keep all my favorite comic books."should be"...is my bookcase..."
"in the left corner"要改成at the left corner.
不好意思in the corner
應改為on the corner
我改錯了
I keep my favorite comic books in my bookcases, too. >.<
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