Monday, January 08, 2007

My Bedroom - draft one

My bedroom gives me a feeling of security. When you enter my bedroom, the first thing you notice is the large window with a beautiful curtain. Next to the large window, in the left corner,
is my wardrobe where I keep my clothes. My dresser is located in the right corner. On the right, between the dresser and the desk, is my bed. And it's also opposite to the window. Finally, next to the desk, is my bookcases where I keep all my favorite comic books. My bedroom is like my castle , so it gives me a feeling of security.

7 Comments:

At 11:58 AM , Blogger 林小雞 said...

Maybe you can change the way to express you feeling. Too many words duplicate. That's my suggestion.

like last sentence you may change

so it makes me a sense of safty.

 
At 3:51 PM , Blogger Penny said...

your bedroom sounds like a sweet space.

 
At 7:50 PM , Blogger Sally Sun said...

in the left corner
我會用at the left corner

 
At 10:26 AM , Blogger Debie said...

"next to the desk, is my bookcases where I keep all my favorite comic books."should be"...is my bookcase..."

 
At 11:59 AM , Blogger 飛飛飛 said...

"in the left corner"要改成at the left corner.

 
At 9:12 PM , Blogger Sally Sun said...

不好意思in the corner
應改為on the corner
我改錯了

 
At 8:38 AM , Blogger Unknown said...

I keep my favorite comic books in my bookcases, too. >.<

 

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