Thursday, May 24, 2007

Computer - draft one

The computer is an invention of great influence in twentieth century. They have already been widely used, such as at home, in industries, in education, in searches, and many other fields. We use them to gain entertainment, such as playing on-line games, watching films, and so on. We use them to collect the information we need. Furthermore, a number of experts use them to do certain professional tasks; for instance, they are used to draw a blueprint, to control machines, and many other things. Undoubtedly, computers play an important role in automation and our daily lives.

From my point of view, our lives really become more convenient with computers. For example, they shorten the distance between country to country, even culture to culture. We release stress by playing computer games. It goes without saying that computers are necessary to human beings.

5 Comments:

At 8:12 PM , Blogger Debie said...

Your topic sentences should be the same of the handouts.

 
At 8:27 PM , Blogger Sally Sun said...

use可以試著找找其他字代替出現率太高

From my point of view我覺得用In my opinion較好
From my point of view應該也可以

good!

 
At 2:16 PM , Blogger Penny said...

between 什麼跟什麼之間
你要不要用複數型比較好?!

篇幅可以再加大一些!

 
At 11:01 PM , Blogger Vivian said...

大致上都ok,沒什麼問題

 
At 12:00 PM , Blogger 傻咩 said...

你第二段沒有說你喜歡還是不喜歡

 

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